Just a random line that I'm writing down before i forget.
Will work on it some more later...
I miss looking at the skies
when they were the blue
of crystalline wonder
scattered with white dreams
before they were torn asunder
and i cant stop looking now
because i never truly started
Scattered
5 months ago
8 of them wept:
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I wish I had the liberty of being somewhat creative. People get a writer's block, I just have a complete shutout of even my own head. bah, envy.
The thought seems/feels/read complete in itself too, can do without an extension too. (me thinks)
i agree with deep purple.
i'm not one to usually comment on the writing style etc. of poetry/prose, but those few lines are beautiful, and i'd leave them as they are.
bravo
Look who I found. Tasweer Mil gayee? lol
write, monsieur!
are u guys kidding me! i loved the extension, its like a caption given to a lovely painting showing you the different dimensions in which you could look at the painting, the different things it could mean..
its like giving a very powerful, very attractive imagery first, and then giving a hint of suggestion for its interpretation and yet maintaining enough leeway to leave the spectator thinking
LOVED IT!
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